I love the title.
Not sure how it really relates to the poem, but I think it's interesting when I look at both the poem and the title.
I didn't one hundred percent catch your flow because sometimes you changed the pattern, but some parts did flow magnificently.
I loved the concept of your poem, and your word choice was flawless. It was very mature and it captured amazing images.
Very well done =]
5/5.

Hm. This one is a lot better than the other one.

First off, I love the title, like all of yours.

Second off, it made more sense and seemed to flow better.

Third, though, I hated that there wasn't <much> flow. You really should put punctuation in there.

Fourth, I did get the meaning this time. Not too bad on it.

Fifth, you had some cliche rhyming, which I didn't like, but it wasn't too bad.

Overall, it was alright. Not the best I've read, but better than the other one of yours.

Sorry, Babe.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5