Your time is left to just a flake
`That was the only line I did not like in this poem. It just sounds strange to me, BUT, this piece was absolutely magnificent. It was so short, simple, and yet a huge bombarding of emotions came rushing towards me as I read it.

But you throw all my words away
Well the trash cans filling up my love
Inevitable to overflow some day
`I just adore those lines. Your word choice is absolutely brilliant. The flow was steady throughout the piece, and everything just wrapped up and went together well. And the ending? I just love it.

Excellent write.
--..MiNDYY

Wow, this is amazingly beautiful poem, I love your wordage and it flowed nicely. By the way it is 5/5 well deserved!!!

Good work on this x

Strangely enough I like this, I don't understand completely it but I like it. It has a nice flow and rhyme that just makes the read easy.

4/5. Although the poem was fairly fluid, it felt average; nothing really stood out. The last line is a good closer, yet the "for heaven's sake" seemed forced, like you had to jump subjects suddenly in order to make the rhyme. The title had me stumped for a little while, but I think I get it. It can be one of two things: You only believe what's happening if she doesn't, or you only believe it if she confirms it, and says she won't change. You're screaming to her the secrets above (what love's about,) but you don't tell the reader what exactly that is, and the reader would be interested to know. Still, a good effort.

The cold rain pierces my skin
Like razors across my fingertips
Brutally betrayed by my kin
Lies flow like a river from their lips
^^aww...wow a lot of emotion just in this stanza itself i can really feel your pain here it makes me feel really bad for you! you used the perfect words thought to get your message across i definitely liked the first line i mean usually rain is usually a calming thing but you turned it into a pain great job!

A million reasons to give out
With my heart pierced by a stake
You'll never find what loves about
Ignorant 'til your heart does break
^^ ah i have meet people like this and i have been this person ironic

I'm screaming to you the secrets above
But you throw all my words away
Well the trash cans filling up my love
Inevitable to overflow some day
^^ the first line seems like an oxymoron! i love it though like usually secrets are whispered! the rest of the stanza was beautiful if i may say so myself : )

But you will ignore the screams I make
And all of the pleas too
Your time is gone, for heavens sake!
I almost feel bad for you
^^ah a twist that was interesting! i like how at the end you feel pity for that person it was sadistic in a good way

Great job ! i loved this poem : ) 5/5