This was umm...good. As a poem, it was okay, it was a bit messy in part, but overall I enjoyed it. I must say, I was getting excited reading it, it was very hypnotic, and for that I congratulate you. the writing in this was very good, and you certainly created some great images (in my mind anyway, lol). I liked the use of the words 'pu**y' and 'd**k', because they're so strong that most people (myself included) may shy away from, yet you used well, and tastefully. Well done.

Brad

P.S. Thanks for your comment on my poem 'Won't you lay with me tonight', I'm gad you enjoyed it.