Hey,
An amazing poem, I love message it, that no matter what happens life will go on, it may hurt now but later it will hurt a lot less. the first stanza was my favorite one, the rhymes are just perfect, I have nothing bad to say about your poem so 5.5
kisses stephanie

WOW, excellent word choice and the imagery was wonderful. You have a good gift to write. I loved this poem from beginning to end. great job! :) 5/5

Wow amazing write...
i love the way you described everything in short details but with alot of meaning in it....
i love the ending where you wrote:

"Finally as we rise from our deepest depression
As we stand in the light of a brand new dawn
No feelings of pain, ache or aggression
The only thing to remember, life carries on "

yeah it has alot in this very short part,
when we get depressed, sometimes we dont feel a thing just like we stand in a brand new day feeling nothing at all, but at the same time its like you are giving an advice saying that we should be strong and life should move on, and we shouldnt stay in the past...

i really liked your poem!
keep up the good work

This was one of the best poems I've read for a while. I absoultly love it. The emotion was just WOW...everyone I'm sure can relate to you in this poem! :-) 5/5

I love it! I really like the metaphor "was stuck in a black hole of loss for so long" really good! also i loved the line "one smile to cover a thousand tears of pain" good! i can sooo compare to this feeling! Also repetition in this is just the cherry on the ice cream! great great work!

After all the pain my heart went through
All those moments I suffered because of you
Tears crashed upon cold floor from sunset to dawn
After all those painful moments, life carries on

THIS CAUGHT ME AND wanted me to read so much more the poem was great and the flow was remarkable loved it 5/5 great poem

Waw this one is realy good and i love the second stanza;Was stuck in the black hole of loss for so long
With no way to exit the place, I do not belong
One smile to cover a thousand tears of pain
One cut to save my soul from deaths evil reign
alot of feeling behinde as we have pain and smile still cover all this pain .5/5

Good sends a great message

After all the pain my heart went through
All those moments I suffered because of you
Tears crashed upon cold floor from sunset to dawn
After all those painful moments, life carries on

^ A beautiful opening. And it really captures the emotion and sets it throughout the piece really well. You worded this stanza perfectly. :]

Was stuck in the black hole of loss for so long
With no way to exit the place, I do not belong
One smile to cover a thousand tears of pain
One cut to save my soul from deaths evil reign

^ Another beautifully written stanza. And I especially favored the last two lines. The emotions were intense and your words run deep. Very nicely written.

Not giving up for the much inviting temptation
Running away is the last thing to bring salvation
Must hang on to the slightest hope before it's gone
Must remember for what I'm fighting, life carries on

^ This stanza brings a lot of truth out. Because a lot of people are tempted to run and many do. Your words are so touching and meaningful.. :]

Finally as we rise from our deepest depression
As we stand in the light of a brand new dawn
No feelings of pain, ache or aggression
The only thing to remember, life carries on

^ A great closing to an amazing poem.

Well, the flow was up and down, here and there. But the [[amazingness]] of the poem makes up for it. [lol] I liked the rhyme scheme you used in the beginning and middle. But I wasn't too fond of the switch on the last stanza from a aabb rhyme scheme to an abab rhyme scheme. In my opinion, it threw off the poem a bit; like it didn't mesh well with the rest of the piece, youknow. I love the idea behind the poem. And your an amazing poet! Well done. 5/5.

This is a really strong poem that well describes your victory in the fight against depression. I really like the repetition of the words "life carries on" although I think you should have somehow incorporated it into the second stanza as well, just for consistency. But apart from that, this was awesome and again, something that I could relate to.

Em xXx

One smile to cover a thousand tears of pain

^that was such a beautiful line and this piece was just wonderful to read.

The imagey you expressed with your words was flawless and truly completed the vibe of the poem for me and made it more of a joy to read. The message was so inspirational and filled with hope that I just had to read the poem again. The emotions were strong and filled with power which made everything you said clear.

Well done *5/5*

Beautifully written. Very inspiring. Great write. 5/5

Beautifully written. Very inspiring. Great write. 5/5

This poem had a great message and a really good deliverence.The word choice was good yet basic and the flow was great.The beginning was incredible and very descriptive which I enjoyed very much but I feel like the ending was kind of weak.It was like you just got tired of writting and couldn't think of anything else.But anyways,I still give you a 5/5

<3Amber

Heya, I've just read this, zomg, wow =p 5/5
I like the ending of each stanza, finishing quite simply with 'life still goes on', apart from the second stanza, which closes with death and evil.. but since there is 3 stanzas that end in 'life still goes on' and only one that ends in 'evil' and 'death' it shows that life>death.. well thats how i read it =)
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I've actually read quite a few of your poems but i found this was the one that meant the most to me, also, I hope that your next write is 'EVEN BETTER' than the last =p hf, great write, keep it up! tom ;p