Sunset Song

Wow i love this poem!!! such detail. it was excellent keep up the good work!!

Thoughts:

Stanza one:
Above the horizon hover sun-stained clouds
Like the combustion of childhood dreams
Beneath indigo skies the fireball shrouds
And mocks the lingering gold sunbeams

[^^Oh man that second line was amazing. The third line was probably my favorite. I love the word "indigo" and it is a more dramatic word for the color of the sky. Bravo]

Second stanza:
Heaven-lit Gateways of the West so amber
Brilliant with majesty glory-deep
Onwards, O Stunning One, to stardom and splendor
By cloud-reined carriage and gentle sleep

[^^on the third line "O Stunning One" I think it should be "Oh Stunning One". Just the "o" threw me off. But still a brilliant stanza]

LAST STANZA:
Calm twilight, so tranquil, like quiet embers
Subsisting within their last dying glow
Serenity, with grandeur gone, nightfall remembers
Childhood memories pale stars bestow

[^^Ah the perfect ending. So soft, yet still leaves a bang.]

My only suggestions were for the second stanza, that I already stated. And maybe adding some more punctuation for the dramatic effect. Some are bothered by no punctuaion, others don't mind. I do. But none the less, still and amazing, imaginative piece.

5/5
~Lace

Wow... I am honestly in awe and speechless in a way... I feel like I can't find the words to express everything that I felt while I wad reading this brilliant poem.
I don't read poems about nature usually but the title captured my attention and this piece pulled me in from the first line. The beauty that you portrayed within every stanza is indescribable.

- Above the horizon hover sun-stained clouds
Like the combustion of childhood dreams
Beneath indigo skies the fireball shrouds
And mocks the lingering gold sunbeams-
^^^
Wonderful and flawless beginning, so captivating and filled with captivating images. The flow and rhymes are excellent along with breathtaking atmosphere within every line.

- Heaven-lit Gateways of the West so amber
Brilliant with majesty glory-deep
Onwards, O Stunning One, to stardom and splendor
By cloud-reined carriage and gentle sleep-
^^^
After reading the first stanza I thought that this poem just can't get any better but I was wrong. This is amazing, endlessly remarkable. The descriptions, flow and details within this stanza are priceless. I really can't express how deeply I enjoyed in every perfectly picked word.

- Calm twilight, so tranquil, like quiet embers
Subsisting within their last dying glow
Serenity, with grandeur gone, nightfall remembers
Childhood memories pale stars bestow-
^^^
Brilliant and divine in a way. Your talent shines through each line. I love the repetition of the childhood memories because that made great connection between the first and the third stanza.

Overall, I love your writing style and this is true poetic gem. This poem is certainly going to my favorites.

Keep writing! 5/5 from me (but I would rate it higher if I could lol)

Wow! You have talent, and I mean it. The first stanza blew me away, and the rest of the poem made my mouth hang wide open!
You are so descriptive, which is so great!
Every part was flawless and perfect in every way! Great job and keep writing!