Loved it....absolutely LOVED it...what else is there to say?!

Amazing poem! First of all, an interesting structure you used fitting the poem so well, and making the whole poem bit stronger.
Like I understood it's about a girl leaving someone dear behind, because the emphasis is on how the girl is feeling and how it's killing her, but I'm sure there is more to it. Really loved the subject.
Pain in the poem is heart-breaking and touching. In some places trying to hold it down and fight against it:
"Her tender heartache she tries to deny"
Specially loved the sentence
"To realize that her mistakes were her own" As we tend to blame others when not seeing that we are the one making the mistakes.
The end
"To the beat of her heart, she gives no reply"
Her soul is dead, but her body still functioning. Brilliant!

5/5 Keep writing