Overall excellent poem, I enjoyed a lot in it, you expressed your self on great way and I just simply dislike the fact that most lines start on same way but that is just my personal opinion. You actually did truly original and creative job with rhymes, and it is really difficult to live good impression on me with rhyming but you did that. Atmosphere of this piece is captivating, you kept my attention in every line with interesting imagery and few lines really impressed me.
Bravo!