Ok. Well this is my thing like that you made it ryhme so much that at some points it was like too easy. like words you picked to rhyme together are words anyone can put together. And i understand its your first so its ok. But next time you might want to challenge yourself. Then also something that could help is that maybe if you fix your flow of the poem it can have it rhyme with out you actually putting words that rhyme, bc its like hidden with the flow and the flow makes it sound like it rhymes. At least thats just with me. maybe. like your last stanza is a good ex. of having the good flow and not having words that exactly rhyme but it like makes me think they do.
Other then that i think its good. =]

We grew and time passes,
Blue was filling over me fast.

Doesn't rhyme dear...

you wanted an honest comment, then here it goes...

ofcourse this is your first poem, and like "Lovezmennot..." says, you tried so hard to rhyme, that you forgot the true meaning of petry, the symbolism and the perspectivation to the real meaning... It is easy to read and easy to understand, people will not wonder about the poem, cause you've placed reality in the words, and doesn't use words to express the true inside feelings, on a deeper level, if you understand what I am saying?
this is only to help you out, but talent comes from experience too...
try to read my latest poem, it might help you out.

Mark

When you rhyme you've got to make sure it sound natural, like you weren't trying to rhyme it just happened. I think if rhymes take away from the meaning of the poem, then you shouldn't do them, just write it in free verse. Don't let the rhymes take away from the emotion, either. Emotion is really important in a poem. You've got to make the reader feel something. Draw them in.

So, for your first rhyming poem it wasn't too bad. Just keep in mind what I said, sorry if I was too harsh. >.<

Keep writing, Ari!
Cayce