Hmm this time i'm looking for a flaw and crap you wont believe how hard i looked jesus! lmao read it twice but your words are deep, they flow in your own tide, now i cant say its perfect for the mere fact that nothing is, but i can say its sure damn close to being perfect i cant, i admit im weak when i read your words hmm tisk tsik on my part great write what can i say

As has been said you are a great writer perhaps no one knows better than the one sitting to my left the fictional touch of a w.hore

I loved your poem. It's really fantastic!

Do you write stories? i think you should, not saying your poems are bad (because they arent i gave it 5/5). buut i do think the way you write would suit stories more, perhaps not though.

umm anyway, great poem, odd again though, as i keep saying. i do like the way u equate the looks and "beauty" and addiction (so to speak), to cigarettes (and how they are addictive) and to the cancer and the bad side of them. it is true when they say too much of a good thing can be bad.

there are a few stand out lines here and there which are really good, and probably make the poem what it is (along with the general theme/idea), however in my personal opinion it isnt as good as others of yours i have read. maybe it is the way you write, i'm not sure. however it is still a fantastic write and some very good creative and mature concepts.

well done. not sure if you were looking for ideas for names or not? but maybe;

cancerous touch
carcinogen eyes

im not really sure, yours is still good though. =)

Great write, truly deep.
Well done xx
5*5

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If I took a sample of your breath, do you think I'd taste your soul? I want to be wrapped in it, in your very veins, but your blood's a tad too thick to be breathing through.
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Definitely a very creative touch you've added here .... "If I took a sample of your breath, do you think I'd taste your soul?" <---- I love that line, it rolls off the tongue so smoothly, almost makes me feel a little devilish saying it ... lol

It's like a carcinogen to my heart, a cancerous touch that won't go away. For your eyes, I could be a little upset. that sunset has set perfect colors in our world, creating a romantic mood. Dance with me, Gorgeous. I promise not to insult you this time, if your cancerous touch promises not to go away.
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I can't help but love this ending .... it intrigues my mind to wonder what has inspired such a piece of such unique wording and creative thinking.
You paint quite amazing imagery ... and your title .... sparked my attention! Very mind enthralling piece you've woven. Well done

Luanne