I like the last stanzaa; but in MY OPINION the rest is a mess?

But its just an opinion :D

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Okay. I'm gonna analyze your poem. :]]
The first stanza, i think, was real good and very interesting. It certainly caught MY attention. :] The second stanza was a bit confusing, but the last line was nicely written. Maybe you could try breaking the sentences differently. Third stanza was alright. .

Next stanza:
"Would Never Faded"
That doesn't make sense with the previous line. You could either take off the "d" in "faded" or add the word "be" in between "never" and "faded" . In my opinion, you should add the "be"

The last stanza was very nicely written as well. It really sums up the whole piece. And there should be more boys like you out there. .or at least around here, that are able to realize this kind of stuff. .anyway. A great write. :] 5/5.

Well screw wat they say...i luuuuuuuuuuuuuvd it! thot it was awesome!

xoxo db4ever
5/5

Its awesome i love it!!!!!!!!

Wow this poem is fantastic!!! I can feel the love you have for her throught the words well done