Very intense poem, i thouht it was very stronly writen andrelateable. nicee job!

~if u can check mine out and tell me what u think~

I like this... there is something about this that I like. This is very good for a first :D

5/5 ~ FountainsOfBlood

This was a very strong piece, you should deffinatly add more on here. You have quite a lot of talent for a 14 year old writer. You must feel strongly about each word you write. I can feel the emotions behin your poem. Nice job and keep it up. Plz feel free to check out some of my work. 5/5
~Forever Broken~

Nice poem..i liked it...keep it up5/5..

This was good but you should use different words to describe the feeling and mood

This is pretty good but like who was the abuser in the poem...besides that lil detail i thought it was pretty good...5/5

I thougth this was good...
there was so much emotion in it...
i could feel your pain.
Great job!

5/5

XxAshleyxX

Wow, I personally dont like this style of writing.... But these few words are home to so much emotion. Good work, thats a hard thing to do!