Comments : Adventure of Confused Mind

  • 16 years ago

    by Sourav

    I enjoyed your poem. It flows well and meaningful. Nice one.

  • 16 years ago

    by Abha

    I dream but I can not sleep
    I scream but I can not weep
    .................................
    this poem is very good, interesting and pleasure to read. you have wonderfully stated the inner state of mind, it is a true poetic venture.......

    one wants to do so much but fail in the endeavour terribly because of utter confusion...
    you have managed to arrange the confusion in order and expressed what we all feel time to time.
    well done keep it up...your lovely poem has driven away the confusion.

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    Without a doubt, this is my favorite one of your poems so far...and I thought that would be hard to do-your poems are all really deep and thought out.
    This one throws you on a ride of emotions, with the oxymorons, and confusion that you can feel. The recurring lines really help the poem along. One of my favorite lines is: 'I dream but I can not sleep' But all of them are really good. I wish I could give you a six :P
    The only thing to change, I would say, is this:
    'Offers also a reason'--it needs 'it' before it, or something, just to make it flow better.
    Really an excellent job. I look forward to more.
    Also, this is out of your normal style...why is really good. It's always a good thing to try different ways of doing what you love! Keep it up!