The words that you used in this poem were amazing...They helped the reader to understand the emotions through out the poem...i like this poem...5/'5

Again you got talent to write this way ,its something new and interesting for me the words or the feeling or both you make me feel confused and its so deeply i enjjoy it
keep write 5/ 5

That was really sad. It was excellently written, and I really enjoyed this, even more than you other. I give a 5/5

I've tasted poison of bitter, liquid lust,
let it consume strangling senses-
drunk avidly from it's fervent well,
walked the plank of imagined ship.

^^ Whoa. Great first stanza, especially the first line. I just fell in love with it. I like the last one also, ahh they were all good.

Reaching out to touch morphing silence,
I've burned down whispering thoughts,
hoped, then died, than hoped again
before the construction's walls crumbled.

^^ Wow, another great stanza. Reaching out to touch silence, that's just amazingly written. I would have never thought to write it like that. Same thing for, burning thoughts. Great metaphores. I like the third line, because even after you die [not literally i'm assuming] you still hope again. It's like you can't be crushed.

Winter dreams absorb former emotions
embodying circular hesitation
within hues of melting innerness;
sanity mirror sapphire longings.

^^Eh, I didn't like this one as much as the others, but it was still good. It seems like you just tried to hard or something. I did like the first line though, but the others I think you could improve them a little. I don't know why, but I don't like the word "innerness". It just kind of disrupts the poem.

Icebound heartbeats lacerate sensations,
slaying weaved, servile simplicity.
I've tasted deceitful feelings, allowed them
to entwine with tangled memories.

^^ Great ending stanza, it was strong and memorable, and pulls this whole poem together.

You had amazing words and imagrey, as always. You always let the reader interpret the meaning of your poems, and never come right out and say it. I think that's a great thing to do in a poem.

Wonderful job!

Keep writng!
Cayce

The wording of the poem was spectacular! unique words, words i had to look up =S but it drew more picture in my head! i loved it! 5/5 the opening stanza could use more work i loved the last stanza amazing loved it

I've tasted poison of bitter, liquid lust,
let it consume strangling senses-
drunk avidly from it's fervent well,
walked the plank of imagined ship.
`Beautiful way to open a piece with such a mesmerizing title. When I read the last line (though I do love the imagery and the concept of it), "of imagined ship" just sounds peculiar. Like there needs to be a little tweak -- I just don't know what.

Reaching out to touch morphing silence,
I've burned down whispering thoughts,
hoped, then died, than hoped again
before the construction's walls crumbled.
`"than" should be "then." The way you talk of silence -- I could literally imagine it thriving. The use of "morphing" is absolutely hypnotizing. Such beautiful depictions that this gives.

Winter dreams absorb former emotions
embodying circular hesitation
within hues of melting innerness;
sanity mirror sapphire longings.
`Did you mean "mirrors" or is it really supposed to be "mirror" ? Anyhow, this stanza kind of weakened the piece for me -- it's great, but not as amazing. And "innerness" made me squirm a bit ... It's an awkward choice of word for me.

Icebound heartbeats lacerate sensations,
slaying weaved, servile simplicity.
I've tasted deceitful feelings, allowed them
to entwine with tangled memories.
`When you break the "allowed them to entwine with tangled memories," maybe I just read it weird, but it also sounded peculiar, but either way -- this is a VERY powerful ending, and the lexis here is just daring, so gripping and just utterly stunning. "ICEBOUND heartbeats LACERATE sensations, SLAYiNG weaved, servile simplicity." Oh, man, the diction just gave me goosebumps.

Marvelous work .
--..MiNDYY

This poem is a relative hard read, however i do not dislike it. Not sure I understand sanity mirror sapphire longings. Would love explanation. All in all, a pleasure to read.

To me, this poem sounds unfinished. Usually poems will end with a BANG, or some sort of dramatic effect, and I didn't see one with this. Maybe I just want to read more of it? Probably.
"I've tasted poison of bitter, liquid lust,"
The very first line, drew me in. That is an amazing quality to have. It's hard to be creative like that.
I am more into poetry that rhymes, and think that this would be a much better poem if it did, but I don't think you should change it. But your word choice, and expression was portrayed very well. =)
5/5

Title is simply majestic, I must say that i don't think that you have that in mind but in my mind you created some picture of mental walking and along with images I could see your emotions and impressions changing.

-I've tasted poison of bitter, liquid lust,
let it consume strangling senses-
drunk avidly from it's fervent well,
walked the plank of imagined ship.-

^Brilliant start, so remarkable and vivid description, every word is on the right place, truly creative and refreshing write.

-Reaching out to touch morphing silence,
I've burned down whispering thoughts,
hoped, then died, than hoped again
before the construction's walls crumbled.-

^Third line absolutely impressed me, wow, whole stanza is incredible and I admire the way that you built it's construction, it is free but it posses touch of elegant beauty, overall truly powerful.

-Winter dreams absorb former emotions
embodying circular hesitation
within hues of melting innerness;
sanity mirror sapphire longings.-

Overall another effective stanza, it has great atmosphere, it is little more tangled and complex than first two. I think that last line has amazing substance and depth but I also think that you broke the compact rhythm of the piece in it.

-Icebound heartbeats lacerate sensations,
slaying weaved, servile simplicity.
I've tasted deceitful feelings, allowed them
to entwine with tangled memories. -

First line is priceless, you truly truly amazed me with it, still I, and this is totally personal opinion, don't like tone of ending line, I think that it would be better if you wrote -allowing them- or -and allowed them-, for the sake of flow, but other than that amazingly written.
Bravo! I enjoyed very much.

"Icebound" was used in another poem, I remember because I loved the line in it dealing with Angels. :D

You've done a wonderful job. And, I absolutely, once again, love this poem.

I see not a thing wrong with it.

Keep it up babe.

"I've tasted poison of bitter, liquid lust,
let it consume strangling senses-
drunk avidly from it's fervent well,
walked the plank of imagined ship."

^^ This right here is amazing, something that so many people can relate to, and due to that fact the opening stanza pulls the reader right in and instantly has them hooked and wanting to read more.

"Reaching out to touch morphing silence,
I've burned down whispering thoughts,
hoped, then died, than hoped again
before the construction's walls crumbled."

The pain and loss in this stanza is remarkably well portrayed here, again something that many can relate to, and I find this stanza to be very moving and touching, really tugs on the heart strings.

"hoped, then died, than hoped again"

^^ Easily my favourite line of the piece so far, the whole process of being let down, then letting someone in again only to have it all blow up is shown so well here and in such few words you manage to provoke some very strong emotions.

"Icebound heartbeats lacerate sensations,
slaying weaved, servile simplicity.
I've tasted deceitful feelings, allowed them
to entwine with tangled memories. "

Oh dear lord..this has me tearing up again, the melancholy in this stanza alone is overwhelming, and again makes the reader feel everything that you are talking about.

I have noticed you have a beautiful way of ending your poems, I find alot of strong poems to have incredibly weak endings, but you always manage to pull it of wondefully, and here is no exception.

Again, beautiful work!