by Amber
Awww this is so sad =( |
My screams fill the biting cold air, |
Your decsriptions and imgery were outstanding. And I really liked the wayy you started out this piece. [The beginning was very alluring and attention grabbing] :] The flow was flawless and this piece was just amazing. :] 5/5. |
by Sarah
A great poem, well written and amazing.... Keep it up 5/5 |
Well written. |
by Dark Secrets
Yea... reality sucks |
For your age you can write. I enjoyed reading the words you've written. Great job. |
This poem has a great flow, good use of words, nice job |
by Tiffany
Has a nice flow.. I liked it.. sad but good.. Great Job!!.. Keep it up.. nd thanks for the cooment!!..^-^ |
by Blissful
I loved how you opened this piece because it instantly captured my attention where I was hooked wanting more! You truly used the right words to create the imagery you desired. The flow was just flawless where nothing seemed forced and everything was a joy to read. The pain you described was easy for me to imagine because I could feel the words you expressed came straight from your heart. Well done *5/5* |
Wow well written |
by RobinAnn13
Pretty good. Awesome word choice and emotions. I also love the storyline. <3 It doesn't feel like it flows very well to me though. Maybe check the meter and eliminate a few words. Other than that very good. I'll give a 4/5 |
Congrats on taking third with this poem. :) Poems like this make contests worth while. |
I really like this poem..good job :] |
by H E Losey
You try to tell a story yet leave the reader wondering what it is about. It seems to be a good story, so tell it all. Be aware of your rhyme and/or rhythm as these two things control the entire piece. |
by Kimberley
Love the emotion in this poem. very descriptive words, its almost like i was feeling what you were when you wrote that. its amazing. keep up the great work!! ~KM~ |