I wanted to tell you that you did a good job on this poem/story. you gave me a picture that i had a little trouble seeing at first but in the end i was able to clear it up.
the words you chose were still good so don't get me wrong. i'm nowhere close to being as good as jennifer as far as correcting a poem.

but i will give you a 5/5 cuz it reminded me of what you were trying to tell us. life is hard and it does have many twists and turns. but overall i loved it. great job. keep it up ^_^