So true.
most people are afraid to stand up for him,
but you wrote about him.
very very good. i loved it <3

Wow i liked this poem not every one sees this...i am in a way religious and i see this alot ppl say i dnt believe in him then they do something bad then they run right around and pray yet i dont get why..i dont go to church but i feel his presents lingering with me every where i go...ok i so wandered off what i was going to say...i doooo love this i wish more ppl saw life like this.
kortney

Very good. :) I loved it. 5/5

AWWWWWWWWWWW i love it cale, it actually made me happy. deffinately a 5/5
this is really sweet and true. i really do love it cale!!!!!!!!!!!!! yay
laura

This is good! I love this!

Nice poem Cale. It was different then what I'm used to with your poems which was a nice switch. You never want to seem predictable. I thought the flow was good and the rhyme was neat. Nice work
5/5

As i travel through the shadow of death
With the devil on my back, I can feel his cold breath!

^^ You need to capitalize the "i". I've always imagined the "Devil's" breath as hot and not cold, but I like how you did something different.

I Shall fear no evil, for God is with me.
Helping me through it, to where I'm suppose to be.

^^ Aww, I loved this part, because it's so true, but the rhymes did seem just a tad forced.

Even though I might sin and fail.
He sent his son to save me with a cross and a nail.

^^ >.< Yep, the rhymes sound forced, but I'm really enjoying the topic. This part really hit me.

Jesus suffered through blood and pain.
All for the worlds sins, we are to blame.

^^ I think you could have described Jesus' pain more, think The Passion of the Christ. That movie was just wow.. it described his pain so very well.

I go to church, listen, pray, and sing songs.
But sometimes I feel like my life's gone wrong.

^^ I think you're straying away from the topic a little with these two lines.

Alot of people come to church because they have to.
But for me, it seems its the only thing to do.

^^ "Alot" needs to be "A lot", always remember a lot is two words. My sixth grade writing teacher drilled that into my head.

I sometimes feel like I'm lost in sin.
But God always seems to take me back in.

^^ This describes my life so well.. I think you could have made it more intense, but it's very relatable.

Sins and pressures are around me at school.
People tell me what to do and whats "Cool".

^^ I think you're straying from the topic again in this one.

Jesus is the way, the truth, and the light.
And when i follow Him I know I'm doing right.

^^ "i" needs to be "I".

But just stay strong and leave it to Him.
Jesus will save you no matter where you've been!

^^ Aww, I loved the ending, it made me smile.

Great job for being a new writer! It's way better than some of my first poems. :]

Keep writing!
Cayce

Rlly good
and so true
i loved it
5/5
great job ur a great writer
i love ur poems
:]

Omgshh.. wow.. you are so awesome..
most people wouldn't think to write about God, I thing that is such a beautiful poem. For sure 5/5. =]

This poem reflects your faith in Almighty.5/5.Good job.keep writing.

This is a very good poem. Not a lot of people stand up and speak about their faith in God, but you have done that in this amazingly written poem. it deserves more then a 5.

Kalee

That was really well writen Cale.
& I'm glad that you arent afraid to show that you love God, because what he did for us was the greatest thing of all.

rach3l