Counting Stars

by Love vs Fate   Mar 27, 2008


One, two we're counting on you.
three, four you shine our floor.
five, six nothing you can't fix.
seven, eight you're all out late.
nine, ten I'll wait till you come again.

this is my way of counting stars when i was little.
i would sneak out of my window and climb on my roof of my shed and just lay there counting the stars.

i would also like to add this, if you read any of my other poems, please feel free to leave a comment about anything. for an example it could be "oh i think you can do some changing up on some things"
or..."it could be better if you changed this"
and I'll try my hardest to make that poem much better for all you viewers.

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  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    I enjoyed this cute children's poem so did my daughter

  • 16 years ago

    by Sammerz

    Well hun all of your poems are excellent and this poem is soo cute i love it
    5/5
    Excellent Job!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Ados

    The counting was good but the end wasnt so godd

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    This poem is really good. Good diction and structure as well. Wonderful write! 5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    what a cute way to count stars =)
    and It rhymes too, loved it
    I just wouldn't place it under nature poems but maybe life? but if you look at it in an other way, nature will do fine as well, stars --> nature..)
    kisses stephanie