The Darkest Harmony.

by Natalie   Mar 27, 2008


"Hold on to your dreams" she said,
"There is always hope for love"
I waited and waited, believing the fed lies.
Feeling my skin gently fade.

Men I met, all victims of circumstance,
Of oppression and dying mothers.
Of an unjust system and cheating wives,
Victims of their own crimes.

"I love you," so many times heard,
Spat at me with disgust.
Only words tailored for a wanting ear,
I always recognized a hidden lie.

Pity these dying ideologies,
Truly malevolence masqueraded.
Hope expired tonight at last,
Unveiling reality as its true demise.

Alas! Light shines blindingly in this hole,
Without hope, love or desire I will endure reality.
My love left unrequited, unreciprocated.
Reaching the darkest harmony within my essence.

© Natalie M. Sarantos 27.03.08..8.48pm.

***As I said to a friend today, I do not hate men. I am just tired of waiting for my Mr. Darcy. This poem is just an extreme exaggeration of feelings within***

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  • 16 years ago

    by Big hersh

    This is a good write keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Devon

    I like the title! very well written! 5/5
    keep up the good work! although u can spend some time sort out the orders of your stanzas to make things more mysterious for readers...

    hav a good day!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    "Hold on to your dreams" she said,
    "There is always hope for love"
    I waited and waited, believing the fed lies.
    Feeling my skin gently fade.

    ^^ Starting with the most popular line of advice, given to a broken heart. This kind of lets the reader, me, know that you don't want, or need such advice. It is a lie and one you have heard so many times before. Basically, shut up and read my scorn! *Fab!*

    Men I met, all victims of circumstance,
    Of oppression and dying mothers.
    Of an unjust system and cheating wives,
    Victims of their own crimes.

    ^^A clear message to men and their excuses. They don't and won't wash with me and anyway you deserve your pain. I certainly don't deserve to wallow in your self pitty! *go girl!*

    "I love you," so many times heard,
    Spat at me with disgust.
    Only words tailored for a wanting ear,
    I always recognized a hidden lie.

    ^^Hash, but I can see your view on this. I like the way 'I love you' is delivered in a globule of saliva. Disgusting image! *well done!*

    Pity these dying ideologies,
    Truly malevolence masqueraded.
    Hope expired tonight at last,
    Unveiling reality as its true demise.

    ^^I really feel the hope for mankind seeped away with this stanza. Dying, malevolence and demise. Reading these words literally sucks the love from me. *Please stop, you're killing me!*

    Alas! Light shines blindingly in this hole,
    Without hope, love or desire I will endure reality.
    My love left unrequited, unreciprocated.
    Reaching the darkest harmony within my essence.

    ^^Too late! This last onslaught twisted the knife to sever the final blood giving artery.*Dead*
    This is an extremley dark and powerfully disparing piece. Although it is exaggerated, it is exactly how we feel when love ends.

    Michael 5/5
    P.S Mr Darcy needs love too!