Really strong and passionate.
i love it

I really liked this part
it makes you wonder if she/you
are going to die in the end
She claimed she'd stop breathing,
To just hear him say "I love you"

This poem helped because I managed to channel all my negativity into it
^^^
Aww hun sorry to hear something so dreadful has happened to you not only once but twice. Writing is a great way of releasing those bottled up emotions.

Such a dark, deep write you've penned here. It started out as something beautiful .... then sadness began to weep through the lines. It left me speechless and at the same time ran a line of chills up my back.

She slaughtered who she was,
In persuit of a love,
A love that never existed.
^^^
Such a touching ending, I am really undecided if I would rather see this in the dark section or the sad. It sure does spark the sad emotion also.

I think perhaps you may of meant "pursuit" in the 2nd line though ... just a little typo perhaps.

Perfectly fitting title, I really liked that!

Great read, it sure had my attention from the get-go
Luanne

This poem is very sad & heartbreaking.... yet well written and truly felt...Readers can actually feel the pain behind the words ...great job ! keep it up 5/5