I really love your this poem story you have been writing. I enjoyed reading this poem.. Looking forward to next ones. ;)

This is really good! A fabulous story and cry for help...magnificent! I love it! The only thing is that the last two lines of third stanza sound a bit written...but really, this is an excellent poem.

Wow. this is really great. the story and the flow are superb...where did you get the inspiration?

Father can you hear me pray,
I took the life of my son today,

^ i really liked these two lines. it was a very strong start to a lovely poem. great work.

The darker the better. this poem is hot