This is good work xx

I like the tittle alot and the way you write is different and beautiful, powerfull words ,and nicely flow, well done 5/5

This is very deep and powerful, greatly written from the beginning to the end. I like the atmosphere that you created along with very vivid descriptions- I could clearly imagine the whole scene. I like the fact that you can write about truly serious topics on such profound and touching way.
I like the flow that you created in this poem, too. Overall, truly greatly done.

The last stanza was def. my favourite. Nicely done. You had a good flow.. Word usuage was great. Emotion was strong. Well done piece.

Thanks for your comments also. =] Much appreciated.