Honey you dont suck at all this is a very good poem and as long as you capture the emotion i think the writing will speak for itself. I actually really enjoyed this poem but for some reason it feels like you'r eholding something back...maybe im wrong but its still a great poem nonetheless and not many people can do that. Kudos ^_-

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I liked this poem alot, especially these lines,
"His lips are red like rubies
And his eyes shine like the stars"

What a wonderful piece of work![[=
Keep up the good work, 5/5.