Comments : What if

  • 14 years ago

    by iRobbiee

    I love this it was good. I think about the what if's all the timee :-/

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Nicko

    What if, life is full of it. Nice work, good flow and rhyme that carried me along to the very end. I did stumble on these couple of lines though, where you may have pushed the rhyme a little.

    "Would you know what to do at all
    Would you prevent my fall"

    I also think your finish could have been slightly stronger, but all in all a thought provoking read, great poem

    Nicko