Its so short and to the point with such power-punched detail in ever line. The words seem to be hand chosen one by one until the greater image is seen.

So short and beautiful. Great choice of words. 5.5

That was like woah-my-gosh AMAZING. :] Your choice of words were. .amazing. And the descriptions and imagery were outstanding. A very well written piece. .And the poem was perfect. :] 5/5.

Good language use x

This was one of the best poems I have ever read. Very deep and your word usage was very effective. The flow was excellent in keeping the read easy. And the concept had me trapped from the first stanza. Great write! 5/5

Wow, very effective use of language. However I did find one tiny mistake.

"tailoring moons hanged over dirty windows,"
(According to the tense of this sentence, it would be 'hung' and not 'hanged'.)

The rest of the poem was flawless.

I'm going to be honest though. I'm not a huge fan of poems like these. It always sounds like a line filled with dictionary words one after the other. The substance is taken away, and sometimes, it just doesn't make sense. Well, in my opinion.

I loved the fact that the messages are not clear in your poems after reading it once. You always have me compelled to read each one of your pieces twice and sometimes three times. The way you fitted words together here was just flawless and it sounded beautiful as it rolled off my tongue when I read it outloud ... amazing. Your use of sound devices to allure the reader were just wonderful to read because you pulled it off so naturally. This piece just captured me in and took me to a different world were I was left wanting more of you words. Well done *5/5*

I like the title of the poem, and you constructed great connection between it and piece and you didn't even mentioned it, which is excellent.

-Whispered sweetness decipher deceptions
within a dream, pallid, in soft, scarlet tones-
lullabies lacerate destined sensations
outlined with zest of vivid, dancing shadows.-

^First line truly captured me, overwhelming refreshing energy of this stanza impressed me. I like each remarkable description, there are so vivid and complex, I also admire your choice of words, still, I personally don't like the fact that I don't see bond between first and second two lines, I don't mind that you have two amazing descriptions, I just think that you should write them in separate stanzas.

-These notes are smeared with lilac's scent
unraveled between eager fingertips,
embedded into emerald, molten pupils
of the wordy demigods, coral demonic angels.-

^Amazing stanza, truly amazing, I had to reread it cause I didn't recognize apposition and than whole stanza didn't make much sense, but when I read it carefully I was truly amazed with depth and beauty of your expression.

-Letters weave intricate, engulfing creations
tailoring moons hanged over dirty windows,
mutilating mirrored silence with hands of steel
designed to merge with cryptic metaphors.-

^I like the ending, it is actually fascinating that you are able to write something effective, creative and complicate as this from your mind. You created truly powerful poem and I enjoyed in it.

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Nicely done. Love your word usuage. Amazing.

You know your titles have always caught my interest and this, This dear is another one which did just that. I adored it. It's been awhile since i've got to comment on any of your works but here I am ready to read.

You know, what I've always loved about your work is your word usage. My family and friends always say to me I come up with the most unique things yet when I look at your poetry mine seems to be simple and lacking something. This piece was another one which captured me with your brillant imagery, interesting flow, and alluring atmosphere.

Whispered sweetness decipher deceptions
within a dream, pallid, in soft, scarlet tones-
lullabies lacerate destined sensations
outlined with zest of vivid, dancing shadows.

Above:

The first line I loved the alliteration used. It rolled straight off my tounge and into a smoothe flow whilst still mangaging to create an image of beauty. The second line I adored because you used such artist like words and as you know art is a passion of mine. The third line well this is gorgeous again because of the alliteration yet the feelings you portrayed here and breath taking.
The fourth line added a contrast, instead of using brighter words you went for shadows which has the darkened gloom feel which you have made come alive.

These notes are smeared with lilac's scent
unraveled between eager fingertips,
embedded into emerald, molten pupils
of the wordy demigods, coral demonic angels.

Above:

The first line is definitly my favoite piece of the poem. I havn't read anything quite like that in awhile. It is something alluring and capturing which really worked well with the imagery you were creating. Well done. The second and third line were interesting and definitly intriguing. The human figure being brought into poetry is a favorite thing of mine expecially when it has been distorted. Such a magical image. The last line of this stanza left me hanging. I just couldn't wait to read more.

Letters weave intricate, engulfing creations
tailoring moons hung over dirty windows,
mutilating mirrored silence with hands of steel
designed to merge with cryptic metaphors.

Above:

This stanza was simply beautiful. The first line the flow seemed to be a bit stiff to me but that's only because of the pause in the line. Second line wow, Tailoring moon? that's definitly different. Love it. Third line Again I liked the darkened evil contrast still mixed with beauty. Quite astonishing to tell you the truth. & the last line was an ending to the poem nicely

So overall a magical poem which I enjoyed reading alot. Keep on writing. Don't be discouraged by anything what so ever. You have the talent to go far.

5/5. ~Mel

Wow...!!! This is remarkable. :)
I love the opening stanza the most! This piece reminds me of the poet that made me want to write myself, Billy Corgan (singer of the Smashing Pumpkins). The way you twist the words together and create these images, it simply makes me smile. "These notes are smeared with lilac's scent".... that made me shudder, because it is so beautiful, it made my spine tingle. You are truly a master of your pen! :)

Nyell, [sorry I wish I knew your name. ><]

It's always a pleasure to read your work even though it gives my brain a workout. You always seem to make things sound so beautiful when they're not. Your vocabulary is outstanding. Your flow is flawless. I just don't understand what you're saying. I mean it has to be something about killing with words because of the title. Right? o.o I wish I was smarter, maybe then I'd understand. Anyways, it was beautiful.

Wonderful job!

Keep writing!
Cayce

I'm guessing when you write your forte is poetry. But, I figure that you'd be a great, amazing novelist. With your amazing ability to explain in such detail, every emotion and everything included.

Never once have I read a poem by you that I've not at least been fond of, usually it's more of a weird kind of love for them, lol.

Keep it up, you've once again done an amazing, amazing job darling.

First off , I must say I love the title . As I was searching for this piece I noticed a lot of your titles that I liked . I am not sure if I commented any of your work before , so I will warn you now I do comment as I read . Which means stanza by stanza and my opinion is likely to change . Just a heads up :]]

First stanza : From the first line , I can already tell your poetry is deep and you take pride in strong , strong words . I loved the first line , very mysterious and got my attention . The rest of the stanza , I can tell your a writer who is not straight to the point . Meaning , you like to give a good mystery with your words . Lol . I loved the word scarlet used in the second line . . . Simply beautiful . And I think that there should be an [ a ] before zest in the last line . Might be like that on purpose , I ' m not quite sure . Overall , a wonderful opening stanza :]]

Second stanza : Wow . I must say , I LOVE that first line . It wow . I don ' t know but I love it . Lilacs scent . That is so dark yet creative . I love it . And the rest of the stanza flows with it . . Your vocabulary is still strong and you ' re creating a beautifully dark story in my mind . Lol . Sounds kinda scary but it ' s true . And I loved how you used the word emerald in there . Instead of using plain colors and scents you use beautiful things . Which is a great addition to your work . Your flow is off in a few minor places in this stanza , but it ' s really not that big of a deal . So again , another great stanza .

Third stanza : I love the word intricate .. And I love it even more the way you used it . The whole first line is beautiful . Your vocabulary is super super strong and creative . Also , the way you threw dirty windows in there . Lol . Not that it was funny , it was just a cool way to lighten the tense mood of the piece . If that makes sense to you . Here comes the darkness . Steel . Mutilating . I love the words and the energy in this piece as a whole . Is enough the kill somebody . [ Not Really But You Get It Right ? ] Another wonderful stanza .

So overall hun , a beautiful piece . You used great wording and imagry . 5 . 5

Amber .

"Whispered sweetness decipher deceptions
within a dream, pallid, in soft, scarlet tones-"

^^ I love this opening here, I find it to be incredibly beautiful, the imagery in these opening lines is stunning.

"lullabies lacerate destined sensations
outlined with zest of vivid, dancing shadows."

^^ You manage to follow the opening lines well here, I find these two lines to beautifully sad, and a little dark with the mention of dancing shadows, whereas I thought the opening two lines showed hope, so the contrast in this stanza is amazing.

"These notes are smeared with lilac's scent
unraveled between eager fingertips,
embedded into emerald, molten pupils
of the wordy demigods, coral demonic angels."

Oh my..this stsnza..wow.
The imagery, the flow, the content, it all melts together for one hell of a powerful stanza, and the "demonic angels" again creates a contrast which I think adds for a beautiful effect on this verse.

The last stanza wraps this piece perfectly, it creates such conflicting emotions for the reader, while the ending line is hard hitting and intense.

My favourite part of this piece is the flow, it doesn't falter once, the words just roll right of my tounge, while the imagery portrayed throughout the piece creates striking pictures in the reader's mind.

While relatively short you manage to keep the poem powerful throughout and the emotion shines through each and every word.