What I've Done

by RavishingEruption   Mar 31, 2008


Every night I lie awake and
Wonder what I've done
Thinking back on words I said
And why its me you shun

I said "I love you" and
Asked if you're okay
Offered up a hug and kiss
When you said "Hun, its been a bad day."

Stupid me! I fell in love
With you and no one else
What I've done is pointless
I can only blame myself

Everyone saw it,
Saw it from the start
The only one who didn't listen
Was my broken heart

What I've done is foolish
I've fallen hard for you
But you'll never love me back
And that's unfortunately true...

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  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This was a cute love poem. Cliche yet cute. I liked the meaning behind this it's sad yet warming at the same time.

    The flow of this was a little off also. I wont repeat what I said in my last comment. I'm sure you'll understand what I mean.

    Some words I just don't like reading in poetry and "stupid" is one of them. I think if you changed the word it would have a better effect. Again though that might be only me no one else.

    The only one who didn't listen
    Was my broken heart

    The two lines above held such emotion for something so simple.

    Overall a simple and effective poem. Well done. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by LiisaMariie143

    Aww what a cute poem. nice flow. i liked it!! you did good with your emotions. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Awww what a cute love poem

  • 16 years ago

    by never let go of the falling angels

    Good job. show much emotion and is welll writen good luck. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    Great write, I loved your starting line it caught my attention. It was simple and clear, very strong expressed emotions. Good Concept aswell.

    Keep it up!

    Veamm

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