I really like the idea behind your poem. I like what you have written, but maybe you could make a little longer...just my thoughts. The last line sounds like a great lead-off for another stanza. Great Job!

Not bad, the 2nd and 3rd lines were very simple but nice.

"It's obvious with me you had no fun."
^ I would work a bit more on this.

Short and simple, but it made me smile. Keep it up!