This was a really good one for your first poem and if you keep writing you'll see how much you will improve.....Good poem
5/5
Nice Job!!!

It is really wonderful for your first.
fix "sigh t" lol.
other then that very powerful for such a short poem.

Great job xx

Nice..great job!!1 i loved it..it was really good

5/5 I liked the flow ;) & thnks for the comment.