A real piece of Art.
'Birth and death, forever destined
Time separates the two
The beginning and end are governed by Him
The middle part for us is due'
I like these lines.Shakespeare once said in his sonnet 'Like as the waves': our every moment moves towards death.So we should not waste our time in vain and futile activities .we should enjoy every moments and devote ourselves to the meaningful works.It is stated in these lines:
'Waiting long may become a crime.
Indomitable doom will gift us woe.' Really an encouraging poem.
"The time's wheel is charged with speed
The eras like picture flash
All civilizations, culture, creed
Down they go, turning trash."
I like your simple rhyme scheme in the first stanza. ABAB, its been used many times before and its the easiest, but you used it very well.
"Inhale-exhaling all souls mime
Infinite life cannot be trailed
Save the life's valuable time. "
Good choice of wording, this is giving the poem more depth.
"Birth and death, forever destined
Time separates the two
The beginning and end are governed by Him
The middle part for us is due"
Very good contrast in this stanza, I like how your putting contrast its a very good thing to do.
"Hurry up it's time!
Be happy in what you owe
Waiting long may become a crime.
Indomitable doom will gift us woe. "
I like this ending its inspirational, yet sweet. Its very good. I like this poem you did a very good job with this. I enjoyed reading this. You should check out some of my poetry some time ;)