You used your words very well, and I loved the way you structured the lines. I'm a harsher person than most and very, very rarely give out 5/5s, but 4/5 is still good. My favorite stanza was the second one, mainly because of the last line, it was brilliantly written, and the whole stanza flowed perfectly. However, I didn't really like the fourth stanza, in fact, I didn't like anything about it, not the words, not the rhymes, nothing, sorry. Apart from that one stanza, for me, it was great.

Brad

Great job, well done xx