by Broken Wings of a Forgotten Angel Mar 31, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
My family plays outside |
I wish it was longer but it was a good poem. I have a friend that was born with a spinal disorder so he's impaired for life. The rhyming was consistent and I didn't find any mistakes. Overall it was a good poem. 4 |
by Baby Rainbow
Good work xx |
This piece was very nicely written. The flow was almost perfect. And you expressed yourself very nicely and clearly, I can feel the emotions bouncing off the piece as I read. It's short, but portrays a lot of sorrow. Excellent work. :] 5/5. |