Wow, coming from som1 who hates non rhyming poems... That was fantabulous hehehe
seriously I love the subject, my friends are always astonished at what I notice about little things and such. And I tell them that that's where the beuty lies. Anyway I love it. 5/5

Took my breath away!!!! Keep up the writing or bloggin or simply jotting, just continue whatever it is your doing.........it's amazing!!! xXx

All i can say is wow.... that was great!

-is at loss for words- Where to start... First off, that was deep and I'm glad I read it!

Stanza (May I call it a stanza?) 1:
"After something passes you so rapidly you do not (...)" I'd change rapidly to quickly or something of the sort. In my mind, rapidly is used in... technology? 0.o I merely think that quickly would be a better word choice. Not very sure why, though...
"beautiful, foggy, after-image"
This is so true. Those images ARE foggy, not blurred, but foggy. Very nice.

Stanza 2:
"Time: the murderer. You: the victim. You think, 'How could time steal a beauty in a way so aggressive?' "
Erm... Are you reading my diary? That's exactly how I've been feeling lately.

Stanza 3:
This feels old. Not bad-old, mind you, just...old. It's very wise, almost to the point of irony, and the way you ended it was perfect, because the word "weary" comes to mind. "stomach twisting way" < Blunt and to the point, no useless description, no pointless adverbs and/or adjectives. I like this.

Stanza 4: Once again, very wise. "Why is it that you only notice now that everything God placed here has a worth?" Excellent ^^

Stanza 5: My favorite stanza by far.
"The exquisite moment you waited so desperately for never found its way back to you." Tragic, as if it had gotten lost amidst the dusty streets of life and memory...
"God has forced you to admire the countless other exquisite things he placed here."
Forcing. That's... very sardonic of you.

Stanza 6: "Time robbed you of its presence" Robbing, thieves... Like I said, this is how I think, it's very strange (in a nice way) to read how I feel.

Stanza 7: Er... It's good. I just can't find anything to say about this stanza.

Overall, very wise. It made me think, and realize a great deal of things. Keep it up! A well-deserved 5/5

I agree i love the subject cuz i like writing about that and ur poems are amazin keep writin more=)

I agree i love the subject cuz i like writing about that and ur poems are amazin keep writin more=)

This is one of those poems that make you stop and think about life. I truly love those. Although it is mainly free verse, the thought behind such statements can not be ignored and should be shared with the world! I love what you wrote here, I hope the world reads it. 5/5

Wow this poems is really amazing and insightful..your a good writer!! never stop writing/.!!!

Wow this poems is really amazing and insightful..your a good writer!! never stop writing/.!!!

Nice poem :)
5/5

Wowie, wow, wow.

u are so great.

ur an amazing poet tabi.

keep it up.

5/5

much love,
mac.<3

Very nice work, reminds me of the saying "stop and smell the roses"

You allowed yourself to ignore the "insignificant"
things in life that there was "just no time" to view.
God reveled and let you discover that in this
limited life, its the small, beautiful things to pursue.

I love the wisdom in your words and it is so true and also neatly packed in this beautiful verse:)

Hugs,

Ingrid 5/5