5/5 xx

See this one is better. Therse a metaphoric undertone that leaves the reader wondering with an aftertaste of what was just read. I love the short simplicity but with energy filled lines.

I must admit that there are not so many words to be read. lol
But it's great.. It's meaningful,... and good choice of words too...
Well done..
Good luck with your contest..

An amazing poem.
Beautifully written.
Hope you do good in the contest.
5/5

Very good:-)

great write, good read:-)

5/5, you have my vote.

Wow...
I really like this. You portrayed your emotions excellently and managed to say so much within such short piece which is impressive. I can relate to this write in a way. I like the atmosphere that you created and the fact that every word seem perfectly picked.
Greatly done!

Amazing!
i like how you started and ended with a version of the same line. great free verse. i liked it a lot! : )

5/5

May I congradulate you for taking joint third :) I simply could not pick one. It was so hard.

#1

I love short poems, and I am truly mesmerized at how you put so much emotion and feeling into such a short and simple piece! I absolutely loved it :) Thankyou for entering it, it made the contest worth while :)