Comments : Orange, yellow and even blue too

  • 16 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    Aww, its so cute and fun. The only thing i dont like (way to destroy your title) is that orange doesnt have its own characteristics. Like each color describes an emotion behind it and orange is just the beginning of a list.
    Also, i dont like how green and blue both end in "all". It forms an unintended repetition.

  • 16 years ago

    by Natalie

    Nice poem. I like how you used the colours of the rainbow.. But correct me if i'm wrong.. I thought yellow symbolised friendship? not happiness? I could be wrong.. It's just that I'm a florsit, and I know yellow roses symbolise friendship.. =]

    But anywho.. It was nicely done.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    Nicely done

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked it. The flow was great as always and i liked the word choice. I liked how you used the colors of the rainbow to symboliz love beauty and freedom. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Good job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    To be honest, I really didn't like the title, I know it was part of the poem, but it just didn't catch my eye.

    "Red is the color that symbolizes love
    Orange, yellow and even blue too
    Yellow equals the happiness within"

    Very true, this is how I see the colors too, well written so far.

    "Green like the grass showing love to all
    Blue as the sky showing freedom for all
    Indigo lights illuminating the beautiful sky
    Violet flowers lay the ground, where love is all around"

    First line: This made me smile, the grass showing love, how sweet.

    Second line: You already wrote "showing" and the repeat in such a small poem threw me off.

    Third line: I did like "indigo lights", that was something I haven't heard used before.

    Fourth line: "lay the ground" really didn't read the best, because of the wording.

    And for the third time you repeated "all", which didn't hold my interest.

    Overall, 4/5 from me, a little work could be done on this piece but it was unique, the idea of writing about the seven colors of the rainbow and what they symbolize.

    Take care and God bless you.

    ~MaryAnne