Deceptions of Fate

by Brittney Follett   Apr 2, 2008


In the back of the room, on top of a shelf, sits a box of many colors.
Take them out, just one by one, and each will tell a different story.
Each color is a piece to a puzzle, a puzzle that we like to call Life.
-What is the importance of them you ask? Well soon we shall see-

[Reach inside the box, my darlin', by fate you have been twisted.]

The white has been brought forth, the simple color of the invisible.
"Love has consumed your heart, But not a soul loves yours in return."
Forsaking the vows of hope and joy, anguish engulfs the broken soul.
-What does it matter if one person perishes? It's no cause for concern-

[Come my child, reach inside me, by fate your heart has been blinded.]

Black has been drawn; darkness enters the room, the color of the bold.
"Domination over reason, Strike out for you are the one in control."
There is no escape as the blows cascade down, they shall always rule.
-Many are strong, others are weak, in this life each person pays a toll-

[Feel around and bring forth your color, by fate you have been greeted.]

The color green has emerged, the unmistakable color of the envious.
"She holds your world when she holds his hand, A world that's yours."
Jealousy controls the mind: actions come into play; death soon follows.
-Sometimes things happen, that the world and I choose to ignore-

[Stretch out your hand and grasp a color, by fate you've been hounded.]

The color red has been withdrawn; it represents the color of the angry.
"He speaks crude words when your back is turned, Do not tolerate it."
Violent phrases emanate, innocent ears are defiled, and hatred is bred.
-Fighting happens in all family units, its something we can permit-

[Seize a color from my lovely box; by fate you have been tempted.]

Dazzling colors remain; they are secreted inside that haunting little box.
It calls you to reach within its cardboard walls and draw out your color.
And you will obey that mesmerizing request whether you realize it or not.
What's the importance of them? By fate you have gained your answer.

By fate you have been twisted.
By fate your heart has been blinded.
By fate you have been greeted.
By fate you have been hounded.
By fate you have been tempted.

By fate you have learned.

Copyright Brittney Follett

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  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Wow...this poem is really good... i love the fact that its long and you really took the time to make this poem perfect...

    you had my attention from beginning to end.. and i can see exactly why this was a poem the won..its flawless.

    good job. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by OLA OLUWASEUN

    The poem is fantastic. However, below are my suggestions.
    Stanza 01:
    I feel the B part of the second line could be something like this in order to make it more poetic and rhyme with others "and a different story each tells". I really like the description it's quite true that life is full of different stories.
    Stanza 02:
    I feel using "The pink..." which commonly represents love might be better than white which commonly represents lack, snow, ice, peace, nothing, frost, and air. The rest is very ok. Thanks.

  • 16 years ago

    by Danielle

    I love your form. it makes this all the better.
    keep up the wonderful writting.

  • 16 years ago

    by Danielle

    I love your form. it makes this all the better.
    keep up the wonderful writting.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very powerful from the beginning to the end. The first stanza caught my attention and held it through every amazing line. I like the message of the whole poem, truly deep and thoughtful.
    Your choice of words seem excellent in every stanza and your descriptions brought me to some other world. I like the whole idea for this piece and I think that you portrayed everything fantastically. Very original poem, filled with vivid imagery and interesting, profound lines.
    I like the lines in the brackets, too, you created very effective flow with them.
    Greatly done!
    5/5 from me

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