Really beautiful:)

You have alot of Potential in your writting...
the way you wrote your poem! made the reader have images of what you were trying to say in the poem! it was well written...

But, i have some advices for you...

i found this word "to gather" i thought maybe you meant to write "Together"

try to put more passion into the poem! and try to put feelings as well, so when the reader reads the poem! he/she would feel exactly what the writter is trying to prove.

keep up the good work

You have alot of Potential in your writting...
the way you wrote your poem! made the reader have images of what you were trying to say in the poem! it was well written...

But, i have some advices for you...

i found this word "to gather" i thought maybe you meant to write "Together"

try to put more passion into the poem! and try to put feelings as well, so when the reader reads the poem! he/she would feel exactly what the writter is trying to prove.

keep up the good work

Nice poem...I like the line

Two bodies one soul your love makes me hole