Comments : Baseball

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Why has no one commented yet? This is brilliant! You wrote this so well and I am so amazed! :)

    "The green waves of the breeze,
    Flowing across the field,
    These moments make time freeze,
    In a world we all keep sealed,"

    You completely drew me in here, and I had to keep reading.

    "My body slides across the grass,
    The heavy weight lands in my glove,
    My teammates cheer as they mass,
    Creating that moment I love,"

    Your rhyme is so great here, you were so descriptive I could imagine watching this!

    Great ending, just a wonderful way to end it.
    The rhyme and flow throughout this poem was terrific and you just described baseball so wonderfully. I really enjoyed reading this, so keep writing and take care!