by firexdancer Apr 3, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
As I lie awake, I dreamlessly dream about dreaming. |
by RetroRavey
I really like it. Very vivid description, it kinda sucked me in so I just wanted to keep reading. |
As I lie awake, I dreamlessly dream about dreaming. |
Wooowwww gaby. I could really relate to pieces of this poem. it was just like you were speaking but with a unique way of saying things. Easy to understand and awesome descriptions. Creative descriptions. I wasn't sure I liked the use of dreamlessly dreaming of dreaming in the first line. it's got the rhyme and repetition and stuff, but I thought the repetition was good, but also i wasn't sure if i liked the word being used 3 times in a row, but it has a flow or rythem to it as you read it so I'm not sure on it. |
by william
That is just truth |
by Emma
Even if we're not insomniacs, we all understand the feeling of not being able to sleep and the pain that can come when we start to think about things in bed. A great choice of subject for a poem, and the poem itself was clearly very carefully crafted. You express yourself very beautifully. Xxx |