I really love this poem because i know what it feels like when your life is so out of control. I liked this poem

Awww, thats really good. i liked it. sort of a prayer to make the inner child feel safe. it was good keep it up xxx

Okay i love it. it rocks. it touches me as a reader you know cause we all have to save ourselves from ourselves sometimes. it is a great poem.

Good job. I liked it because our worst enemy truly is ourselves. we judge ourselves more than anybody will ever judge us. short, but got the point across, and that takes talent. =)

Caitlin

This seemed to read like a series of statement with no real reason as to why you wanted to live. I think in this and the last poem I read of yours you do yourself alot of injustice to your work by just sharing with the reader one half of the whole story just a thought Plot121

Now this poem conveyed emotion
which was lacking in some of your others
I thought this poem was original
it had a good rhythm
and the vocabulary was right on
I thought the idea was really neat
The end line has a gramatical error
might want to fix that
you=your
nice job
5/5

I truly liked this poem. It was a little on the short side, but it was still emotional and it got the point across. Even though it was short, it still flowed nicely and you used really great descriptive words. 5/5

Overall, this is very touching piece filled with an amount of emotions expressed in a good way.

Honestly, I don't like the rhymes because they are too common and basic and I think that they should be more original. All in all you created good flow but the rhymes need to be revised.

Interesting idea for a piece, too.

One of my favorites