Ouch. This was painful to read because I could feel each emotion you expressed through your words. The way you described the path of the tear was flawless and your use of imagery enhanced this piece. Well done *5/5*

You could almost see the girl in the poem. I really enjoyed this poem. Great Job.
Emma 5/5

WOW ANOTHER GREAT POEM
I FELT THIS WAY MANY TIMES BEFORE
BUT THOUGHTS HAVE CROSSED MY MIND
5/5

This poem expresses some intense feelings. The stanza (in this case the whole poem) is not orginized and there are no rhymes. The choosing of words fits the subject nicely and the metaphorical expressions do their job.
A good poem, try to revise and rhyme next time 4/5

Nice poem :)
5/5

Flow was off for me

The way you follow the path of a single tear is much more effective than just describing lots of them and the way you link the two sections of the poem so well. I don't think there was anything wrong with the flow, it seemed to read fine to me.

Em xXx

I like this, but i thought of it as more of in a story form than poem. but it was great, had a wonderful, but painful message.. keep up the great work!:]

Aw!.. i love it...short, sweet, and to the point!...great!
***aLy***

Love it, again its a touching subject to write on so i don't actually no what to say

Again..the descriptions here is well explained... i could visualize the tear moving down from her eyes to her cheeks... the picturization is great...

also the later part is beautifully written...
Excellent write..

Shivers down my spine--the words show and tell at the same time that there's nothing for me to have to interpret, but all the same it makes me think so much. Which is absolutely hard to do. The piece is hauntingly beautiful. The detailing of every move of that tear running down her face just adds so much more emotion -- it's powerful. And the end just adds to the shadowed glow of this poem.

--..MiNDYY

I love this poem, Short but sweet and very descriptive...great job :]

Such beautiful descriptions! I could totally see this girl. I can relate to this EXACTALLY. It always makes a poem better when you can actually relate to what message/senerio the author is conveying. Anyway, absolutely stunning imagery. 5/5 Keep it up!
~Stefanie

I love this one! Its a topic that i think alot of people deal with!!! You are an amazing poet!!!

This poem is very well written expressing a feeling of hopelessness while desiring perfection

well done

*tear* *sniffle* i love it. it is soo............emotional and wonderful and i cant put it into words soo... i love it. ~KM~