Like Fireworks

by No Need For A Name   Apr 6, 2008


This air around me
Nothing moving
This sun is burning
On me glistening
So I stand here and
Let the fire grow
And let the wind
Blow me up like fireworks

This daily desert
Pressing onward
And I can't remember
Your last words
The last I heard for
Millions of hours
But I felt inside that
I was like fireworks

So here we are
Our last hour
Enough time to say bye
Until we shower
In sand and dust
Like our controls
Our mechanics rust
Like our fireworks
To skies we must

This daily desert's
Conquered all us
We wave goodbye and
Blow up like fireworks

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  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "On me glistening"
    [On me, glistening]
    - There needs to be a comma within this line due to the fact that it's separating 'sentences'

    "So I stand here and
    Let the fire grow
    And let the wind"
    [So I stand here
    letting the fire grow,
    letting the wind]
    - I think that your original version of these three lines was a bit blunt and ill-poetic. Changing it up a bit and removing the word (used x2) 'and' makes it sound better and more poetic.

    I enjoyed this poem. I figured by your lyrics that you could write some spicy poetry as well, unique too. You've done a swell job putting emotions into words with amazingly vivid imagery.

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