A Cut Too Deep

by Poetic Ninja aka Papachopchop   Apr 6, 2008


The weight of the world,
It's too much to bear,
I want to scream out,
And pull out my hair,

I walk silently to my room,
To have an affair,
Me and my razor,
Have some time to share.

I take a deep breath,
Take a chance to prepare,
I rake it across,
The skin splits and tears,

The blood flows so freely,
I begin to get scared,
I don't think this is a wound,
That can't be repaired,

I fall to the ground,
I smell death in the air,
This wound is too much,
I don't think I can bear,

Further I sink,
Down into satan's lair,
All because this world,
Just isn't fair.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hidden1

    WOWWW!!!! I love this poem soooo much. I how you used a razor to end your pain and the ending OMG is jst crazy. I llove how you said you are having an affair with your razor. This is just a deep and intense poem. Life is like that sometimes and it does cause us to have some deep cuts that we feel won't heal. This is an amazing poem. I think some art work should go with this poem. Maybe somehing in black and white but have the blood from the wrists in a deep dark red. Think about it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Hidden1

    WOWWW!!!! I love this poem soooo much. I how you used a razor to end your pain and the ending OMG is jst crazy. I llove how you said you are having an affair with your razor. This is just a deep and intense poem. Life is like that sometimes and it does cause us to have some deep cuts that we feel won't heal. This is an amazing poem. I think some art work should go with this poem. Maybe somehing in black and white but have the blood from the wrists in a deep dark red. Think about it.

  • 16 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    A very well written piece of poetry 5/5 an amazing choice of words

    Keep Writing, hun
    As Always,
    ~NinjaGirl~

  • 16 years ago

    by BitterXSweetness

    Wow. U never stop surprising me with ur poems. This was really a powerful poem. It's was deep and as u know it sorta hit's close 2 home 4 me. Even though u made the poem in a way that they person died, I saw it a different way. Even ppl cut,... when I cut, sometimes I feel like that cut is so deep that it's going 2 be the end. But what I 4get 2 realize that every time I pick up that blade I'm already there. Idk, but that's that I saw out of ur poem. Either way that u put it, it was still an amazing job. Ur flow was really good, ur use of words, everything. 5/5

    .:Rach:.

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    I didn't expect the ending, good job