What a pain filled piece you have penned. The agony cries from your words.

In a dark ally, I was revived
Taken by force without any choice
Not knowing my rights;
never learned how to fight...
Absorbed by fear...mesmerized by what I hear
A nobody I must be !

The terrible feelings of being nothing. Very heartbreakiing.

Led to prison with iron chains
Giving up is what really scars
A loss of identity is what I suffer
Who I was and who I will be...
Is no longer worth treasure !

The finality of giving in to these feelings is very sad,
Good job.
Take care Cindy

Amaziiing !! i rly liike it
great use of words very meaningful
good job
xoxo

Woow great poem... i like it... 5/5

Thanks for the comments, one can relate to parts of your poem it is magnificent. Keep it up. 10/10

Well, I am speechless, seriously...
I can TOTALLY relate, That was really inspiring

In a dark ally, I was revived
Taken by force without any choice
Not knowing my rights;
never learned how to fight...
Absorbed by fear...mesmerized by what I hear
A nobody I must be !

This is the part that actually took all over me
This mix of feelings is really hard to be expressed, but you just did it so smoothly

Nicely done,

MazE

Don't know what to say!! i'm absolutly speechless... you've got such an amasing talent ...
each part is wooow .... so many strong feelings and perfectly rythmed..

keep it up
( thx for your comments as well)

This is amazing.

You are a really talented poet!

Hey thanks for the comment.
i realli like this 1. i like how u put things
5/5

Great use of words. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Great work....cant wait to read more :-)

Wow very good!!

SO DEEP!! BUT NICE PEACE!!

5/5

I like that kinda write so much which is sad and deep...U expressed ur pain and sorrow in a simple and touchy way..
I enjoyed reading ur poem:)..
Good job,plz keep it up..

Good poem, very descriptive, I enjoyed how you painted the mood before you actually set up the actual poem, you don't see that too often.

-3rd Stanza
A worrier of light I once was
-I think it's suppose to be warrior

The flow was ok, it didn't take away or give to it in any way shape or form, but it was pretty good.

Over all this poem is Excellent.

5/5

Hey

Thank you for your comments ... :)

And no ''Loss of identity'' is not about rape or anything like that...These things are reality and the ugly face of truth of every country & culture... My poem is about all the ugly things out there.. to all the people who suffer from them...whether it's war, rape, crime or whatever.. I believe in peace and I want it to become a reality not a dream...

Wow ! 5/5 ! loved it !

An amazing poem. I was shivering while I read it. 5/5