Comments : Ode to an Aging Home

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Again I like the write but your rhyme scheme catches one off guard. It reads well but my mind rebels after the read due to the rhyme. Oh, well perhaps just my mind does this. I would, it it were I, drop the "the" from line 5 and just have "shed rain".
    As stated earlier another really fine write.