This is a really beautiful poem David. it is very clear that you love this lucky girl a lot. a wonderful poem. 5/5

Kalee

David,

What a beautiful tribute to your muse:)
I love your romantic soul.

Love, always

5/5 Ingrid

If the sun rises tomorrow,
I'd tell you over and over again
That you're my girl and I'll try
With my whole heart,
Every breath I take, every pounding beat
I love you so much
^^^
Your ink has penned the beating of your heart with lines of love and beauty.

I hope the sun rises tomorrow
So I can see you once more
Laying beside me, asleep in my arms
^^^
One of love's greatest wishes.

With if no sun rises tomorrow?
The missed opportunity to be kissed by you
To be held closely by you,
Already my heart aches for you,
Longs to be with you, the pain becoming stronger each minute
I love you so much
^^^
I think in your first line you mean ...
"What if no sun rises tomorrow?"

I like how you ending the first and last stanza the same. The depth of your love is so very evident in this piece and the hope so very profound.
Nice read
Luanne

David
A very loving and sweet poem. Your love can be felt in this piece.
Good job!
Take Care Cindy

A very romantic piece for your girly, which came from the heart.. beautiful!

I really felt to the point that I almost cried, honestly. It was a touching and deep. piece.

I love this so much
But makes me sad because i know you will never feel this way about me
My favourite lines are:
I hope the sun rises tomorrow
So I can see you once more
Laying beside me, asleep in my arms
It really touches my heart

Hannah 5/5

Another good poem.. but i didnt feel like the ending was as strong as it could have been but it was an okay ending. i was just expecting more.. but other than that you did a great job with expressing your emotions for this girl. nice job. 5/5