Icy emptiness

by Lizaveta   Apr 8, 2008


I wrote this poem a year ago in Russian, and now i found it and tried to translate into English. i'm not sure if i managed to get the message across in the last stanza but anyways here it is

Emptiness. And black emotions
Have flooded my eyes, overall
It's not sad, it's not dark, it is just empty
In my pelted into the corner soul.

Loneliness. It is so simple.
Nothing to live for and nothing to lose.
It's like a knife, not sharp but rusty
Will cut my heart till pain is profuse.

It's vain. I might have been fighting,
But now in the corner.... No, forward, again.
Each step is thrilling not exciting
Threatened to fall under ice... is it all vain?

It's cold there, nothing to breath
As dirty icy water arrives.
Thought are between life and death
But feelings are all covered with ice.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Ash

    Yet agian you have written another unique piece. Your style definately acentuates your feelings and the way each stanza first starts almost with an idea that continues throughout that stanza.
    I'm amazed by your talent and have lost all words to shower any more praise onto your work! 1mil/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is a lot better than the last one I commented. The stanzas were orginized and the subject was clear. The rhymes matched the messege perfectly, and the imagary objects gave this poem it's right mood. Nice job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    Is this really written in Russian?
    Wow! anyways, All of the lines were smooth, they rhyme and imagery is great. For me it was really short but definitely complete with style and have such message on it. I also love the title.

    Keep it up!
    Veamm

  • 16 years ago

    by damont

    Wonderful poem and well translated. i could understand it. its wonderfully written and explained. keep writing i like that i can imagine these things you describe to an extent.

  • 16 years ago

    by Corruption

    Great job you did a real good job
    i bet it is even better in russian
    i would like to read it in russian if i knew russian
    but yeah very good job
    i liked it alot
    and thx for the comment
    glad you enjoyed it:D:D

    Keenan

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