Wow, wow, amazingly done, so short but core of this is priceless... Truly original and remarkable piece, I admire your way with words, this is endlessly powerful and you said So much with so little words, I am honestly left in awe, amazed by extreme beauty of this lines.
Every word is picked incredibly, I absolutely think that this is so deep and simply, my new favorite poem, so creative. I don't know where you got idea for it, but is is impressionable, ending impressed me, and start, and truly each line, bravo!!!
This deserve so much more than usual 5/5

So short
but so much was said
excellant word choice
5/5