Comments : Artistically Broken

  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Again I like the fact that you pay close attention to discriptive details. It really livens up the readers imagination allowing for a vivid picture to dance in their minds.

    The pain and sorrow seem to leap of the page and tug at the readers mindset while screaming about experiences that the majority of society has lived through.

    In your last stanza you use the word "brake".. I think you meant "break" lol...

    ~~Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by ilovethenightsky

    Oooh..such a lovely poem. My favorite line is "fragrance of fallacies recolor my inner tunes
    replaying rosy sad songs, notes of painful revelation." I can really feel the sorrow and pain your piece. Nice choice of title too.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alex

    Wow, that was amazing. I wish I could write so artistically. You must be a painter, if you're not you'd be a beautiful one. You could actually paint something about this poem, you could even write the poem on the back of the painting, or on the painting!

    "Lilies bloom over the shards of mutilated conscience
    embedding stinging roots into its pedestal of ice" (That was my favorite.)

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Wow.. i am speechless.. I had to read this poem a few times to really appreciate it because there is so much description and detail that it is almost impossible to capture it all by just a single read..

    you are amazingly talented and i can tell by just reading this beautiful piece.. this is brilliantly written and i enjoyed every line and every detail!

    This poem is so powerful and deep, I just got lost in it while I was reading it. Amazing job! and I also really enjoyed the title. 5/5 for sure! =) and thanks for the comment.

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Let me start off by saying you choice of words just utterly blew me away and left me in awe. I am running out of words to describe your poetry but you manage to leave me breathless with each new poem by you. Alright on to your poem.

    Wow. I loved the vibe and mood you created in this one. It was different and eery in a way you made work which was amazing. You captured such beautiful emotions with your words that I was left speechless.

    Overall another amazing piece by you my dear. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Your detail of this poem is definitly unique. You pay so much attention to your work, you take pride in it. I can see all this by the way you write. Your wonderful with spelling, puctuation ect which really shows how much the writer appareciates their work.

    The nature effect which was portrayed here was a beautiful idea. I know you do write nature poems but not as many but it's beautiful to see you having a combination here. It gave an almost calm feeling to the atmosphere.

    The sorrow placed within each line really touched my emotions. Mixing nature and sorrow together had an amazing effect over me. I liked the fact that it was a sad poem though you used calm words not really bitter, harsh and agonizing words.

    This piece stunned me Nyell. I know why I have you on my favorite authors as you definitly are my favorite. Both you and nix anyways =)

    ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    WOW.
    This IS being artistically broken. The imagery used in this was superb. I really can't get over that. I am an artist, [or I try to be] and reading this was like looking at a painting.
    I loved the first stanza. Creating imagery, and using your words to express something like a flower, was creative.
    This was completely flawless in my eyes. I really mean that.
    5/5