Bring My Hopes Up The High Ropes Right Along With You .

by ABake   Apr 8, 2008


Did I ever tell you I loved the way you ran your fingers through my hair ?
I do not think so , but if I did I might not of meant it then .
So tell me dear , tell me all of your dreams [ Not That I Am In Them ]
I long to be the sheets on your bed , maybe the water on your skin --
Look me in the eyes , give me a few false hopes to hold on to tightly ;
Plans of carving our names into the huge tree in your front yard . . .
I fall asleep at night just to dream of these events actually happening ,
But blow your whistle and call in the dog , the night is almost over :
You have no need for me any longer , like an out of style winter coat .
Oh how I would love to be near you , just embracing your delicate skin --
Goose bumps rise on my arms at the mere thought of being near you .
But oh well , I guess someone else will carve there names in that tree ;
[ Just Keep Rising My Already High Hopes Higher And Higher ]

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  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    The whole piece is mind- blowing. I truly can't find anything to critique here, I simply loved every excellently written line. Your descriptions are flawless and the imagery brought me to completely different wold. I think that you expressed your emotions on a great way and I admire the originality of this write. Something about this piece truly took my breath away- the atmosphere that you created is endlessly captivating. Every line holds deep beauty and bits of sadness which made this piece very heartfelt from the beginning to the end.
    I am in awe and honestly amazed by this.
    The title is also very interesting, it caught my attention and made me read this piece.
    The opening line pulled me right into the fantastic, emotional story that you portrayed and the ending line is great conclusion to the whole piece and also very effective. I can't pick my favorite part of this write cause there are a lot of remarkable lines.
    You have a way with words.
    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh my hun I just loved that last line. I could related with the feeling of hope even if it is dimming because sometimes it is the only thing that keeps us going and we should clench to it with frantic fingers. Your writing style is so unique and refreshing to read. I loved your use of brackets .. truly brought a different and enjoyable effect to the whole poem. The imagery was just flawless and I just loved how innocent and beautiful it all was.

    "I fall asleep at night just to dream of these events actually happening"
    ^Oh I could relate with that line with all my heart. Sometimes dreams are all we have until we find the one that transforms them into reality ..

    Well done *5/5*

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