My baby
by Xx Grieving from the inside outxX Apr 9, 2008
|
Welcome to the world my sweet child i wish i could say there are no fear but i would be lying to you. there are sweet people, mean people, and evil people in this world i wish i could keep you safe in my arms forever and never let u go. with your bright blue eyes and your blond hair i love your small hands and your cute little feet and your cute face i love my sweet beautiful small little girl.well welcome to the world me and your father love u very very much and we can not wait to take u home and start our new family see you in my dreams |
Did You Like This Poem?
Latest Comments
-
16 years ago
by Sonya
I love this poem hun
-
16 years ago
by neo
Lovely poem. heart felt
-
16 years ago
The messege was thought out. I liked it, but it needs a lot of work. It is in the form of a paragraph, make it into stanzas and the structure would be much better. For example:
Welcome to the world,
my sweet child.
I wish I could say
There are no fears,
But I would be lying to you.
There are sweet people, mean people,
And evil people in this world.
I wish I could keep you safe
In my arms forever,
And never let you go.
I also added puncuation and fixed words such as "u" and made them "you" and I took "i" and made it capitalized. Just with a few changes like so, the poem becomes that much strong as a whole.
Peace, Joe
