by Veamm Apr 10, 2008
category :
Fun, humor /
about life
I like |
by Vanessa
The obious thing by now is that some of it rhymed and some of it didn't. This made the flow pretty rocky, but other than that you used excellent word choices, and I like your style. Try stepping up your vocabulary a bit, to add power to your read, and wait a couple of days after you write your poem and reread it outloud it is easier to spot the flow errors that way. 4/5 |
by JustKristina
I liked this poem.. but ((haha.. here it comes)) i didn't like how the flow was way off and it sometimes rhymed, and other times it didn't. I think that you should work on that. Its a great start for an amazing poem! witha little bit of work, it could be fantabulous! Keep up the great work! and keep on writing! you have a great start! :] |
by xxxStarSxxx
This is a cute poem. I like how it was short and to the point. Very unique style, I've got to say. I'm not sure if you were trying to rhyme but if you were there were a few errors: |
by Kaila
Okay overall the poem was pretty good |